I didn't get much constructive, or silly, feedback from my first pitch, just that it sounded good and well prepared. The thing I tried to change (let me know if I'm wrong) is that I tried to be a little more specific about what my idea is. If I was pitching this to a housing professional they would definitely understand. I was closer to a minute on the last pitch, but I'm not sure what I should cut out. Any ideas?
Wednesday, February 17, 2016
Elevator Pitch No. 2
Pitch Take 2:
I didn't get much constructive, or silly, feedback from my first pitch, just that it sounded good and well prepared. The thing I tried to change (let me know if I'm wrong) is that I tried to be a little more specific about what my idea is. If I was pitching this to a housing professional they would definitely understand. I was closer to a minute on the last pitch, but I'm not sure what I should cut out. Any ideas?
I didn't get much constructive, or silly, feedback from my first pitch, just that it sounded good and well prepared. The thing I tried to change (let me know if I'm wrong) is that I tried to be a little more specific about what my idea is. If I was pitching this to a housing professional they would definitely understand. I was closer to a minute on the last pitch, but I'm not sure what I should cut out. Any ideas?
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Nice job Emily!
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ReplyDeleteExcellent job on this pitch. I also did not really receive to much constructive or silly feedback from my first pitch so I ended up giving essentially the same pitch but slightly more polished. If you feel your idea can not be limited to a minute then don't do so. A pitch will be effective if it addresses all the needs of the customer and it seems you did that here. If you would like to see my pitch please go to: http://mitchallenent3003.blogspot.com/
Hi Emily, I think you did a great job in this pitch because you spoke very clearly and illustrated the most important points about your idea. I also liked how you told us about your RA experience and how it inspired you towards coming up with this idea, which I think really helps in getting the audience to know you and grabs their attention. My only critique would be to try not to read off the paper the entire time and maybe try doing a video with the entire pitch memorized because I think it could go really well. Thanks for sharing and good luck!
ReplyDeleteHi Emily! I was thrown back just a little bit in the introduction is because I would have preferred some credentials from you. I think you spoke clearly but it sounds a little performed. I think this is a very unique idea, because people aren't quite concerned with RA's and a social environment for students living in dorms. It seems like you're really passionate about this idea which can only benefit your idea. With your determination and motivation, I have faith in you!
ReplyDeleteCheck out my Elevator Pitch No. 2!
http://nazani95.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2-week-7.html
Emily, I think you did a really great job with this pitch and you have a really great idea going. However, there are some suggestions i would give you to improve your pitch such as not reading from a paper throughout the entire video. If you could maybe next time you can type your pitch on your computer so you can look at it on there but not staring down at a piece of paper. You went into great detail and don't be afraid to go over the minute mark. Here is the link to my pitch if you are interested: http://ariellechristina.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no2.html
ReplyDeleteEmily, I think you did a really fantastic job in your pitch. You seem very passionate about your idea, and it is something that I think could be really useful for a specific demographic. You seem very confident in your delivery and that is something a lot of people don't have. I can see there is a lot of room for you to develop and grow this idea and I think it will be very successful. If you have a chance please check out my blog here. http://ethan2you.blogspot.com/
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